Audience Research (Visions Rough Cut)

Audience Research

To assist us to make improvements on our film, we asked some of the other students in our class to take a look at our rough cut and to give us feedback  and advise us o what we need to improve on.

Some of the feedback from the film:

• The length of the opening was too long.
• Scene of the characters walking was stretched out too much.
• Unclear speech.
• The weather (noisy).
• The audience fount it hard to understand the main plot/storyline.

How we are going to improve on our feedback:

Length of the opening

The length of our opening was too long for an opening it was between 4-5 minutes, when realistically our opening had to be 3 minutes long maximum. So for our final piece we have to find a way to shorten down our film by cropping down some of the pointless areas of the film, and perhaps re-record some scenes and shorten them down. I agree with this part of feedback because, as the maximum is 3 minutes and we exceeded that limit.

Scenes that were to stretched out

The audience found in our film that we had a lot of clips of the characters just walking and it was very stretched out, referring back to the length of our opening. The scenes of the characters walking took up a big part of the film. To improve on this we can easily cut down the amount of the walking scenes by cropping the bits that were really stretched out. I agree with this part of the feedback, after hearing this feedback I looked over the film and realised that  lot of the film was taken over by walking.

Unclear speech

The audience found in our film that the speech was very unclear, to improve on this we are going to redo a few of the scenes and reassure that it is clear enough for people to understand.

The weather (noise)

The audience noticed in our film, that in the park scene (where a vision and the walking scenes occur) that the weather created a lot of disruption whilst watching the film, as the wind was very strong that day. To improve on this, we could lower the tone of our sound to make the wind less disruptive or we could redo the scenes when the weather is calmer.

The audience fount it hard to understand the main plot

When the audience was giving us feedback, they mentioned that they fount it hard to understand what was going on and that they didn't really understand the storyline. To improve on this we can redo some scenes that drop more hints of what is going on, and make the speech and actions more clear. We could also add little clips of mini visions which presents that the character is suffering with a lot of visions.

Visions Film Opening (Rough Cut)

Rough Cut





This is the rough cut to our film, as you can see still we need to crop this down to at least 3 minutes maximum. We also need to change some scenes and improve them to make the opening make more sense and we also want to vary our camera shots more to create more effect. We also need to put more sound effects, video filters and video effects to finalize our thriller opening.

Visions animatic

Location visit sheet

Production Schedule Location Visit Sheet Programme Title: Visions Client: Writer: Producer: Parveer Mahal Director: Jordan Walters Date:

Rough Sketch/Explanation of location and key points to note Access to location via: Goodmayes park Parveer Mahal house Common room (Lower School) Name and number of location contact: Parveer Mahal mobile phone number:07963181309 Winifred road Dagenham Essex

Health and Safety Issues to note: ●      N/A

Potential Filming Problems : ●      Camera can move about if the cameraman isn’t holding the camera properly. ●      As we are a medium sized group we may have different ideas which can result in us arguing so we have to put the ideas we have in the same film.

Additional Notes:  (map of area/weather forecast etc) Weather can be bad as we expect snow as we at the end of the year.

Story Board

Shot List

Shot List
Scene	Shot Number	Description
1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18	4-5 4-6 3 2 2 4 1 3 1 2 1 1 1-2 1 1 1 1 1	The main character (Lance Filmore gets up out of bed, goes down stairs and has breakfast) The main character gets dressed and goes out side for a walk in the park. Lance walks to the park bench and sits down. Whilst sitting down he sees a jogger who jogs in front of the bench, stops and catches his breath, then carries on jogging. After the jogger leaves, the Lance has a bad headache and holds his head and sees his first vision. In his vision, Lance is being chased by a mysterious man and cannot make out his face. The vision ends and Lance is holding his head. He then takes a visit his local psychiatrist. He approaches the clinic and stares at the sign. He gets escorted by the assistant and gets asked to have a seat. The psychiatrist and the main character have a conversation about the recent visions Lance has had. The psychiatrist finds this interesting; he adjusts his glasses and leaves his seat to search for more paper. Lance notices that the doctor had touched his glasses, which triggered his second vision. In this scene the main character sees someone talking to him and asking for some sort of device, in a sort of interrogation. He makes out the face of the people in the room, one of them looked similar to his psychiatrist and the other similar to the jogger he saw earlier that day in the park. He awakes from his vision with another headache and realises his doctor had left the room. In the last scene he awakes from his sleep in his home, in his bed. He realised it was all a dream. He heard a noise from outside his room, suddenly his door opened slowly and a man in black came in.

Shooting Schedule

Shooting Schedule

Day	Scene	Location	Equipment	Costumes	Props	Cast +Crew
1 2  3 4 5	Lance Filmore walking up the stairs to the doctors.  Psychiatrist Scene. Park scene. Lance Filmore having a vision when jogger passes by. Waking up scene Walking into the park scene Interrogation/ Confrontation	Stairs next to the study room (Robert Clack Lower School) Study room (Robert Clack Lower School). Central Park (Dagenham) 23 Gerald road (Dagenham, Essex) Central Park (Dagenham) Classroom (Robert Clack Lower)	Camera and Tripod. Camera, Tripod. Camera and Tripod Camera and Tripod  Camera and Tripod Camera and Tripod	Lance Filmore- Blue Jacket, Blue jeans, Casual trainers, and Woolly hat. Lance Filmore- Blue Jacket, Blue jeans, Casual trainers, and Woolly hat. Dr.Khan- Red tie, maroon shirt, blue trousers, black cardigan. Glasses. Assistant- Black leather jacket, Grey skirt, Black tights and a blouse.   Lance Filmore- Blue Jacket, Blue jeans, Casual trainers, and Woolly hat. Jogger- Red Fila Jacket, Blue adidas tracksuit bottoms and adidas trainers Lance Filmore- Purple pyjamas and Navy slippers.  Interrogator - White Shirt, Black tie, Black trousers and Black shoes. Lance Filmore- Blue Jacket, Blue jeans, Casual trainers, and Woolly hat. Black shoes, Cream shirt. Black tie, Black trousers	Ear phones and a watch Ear phones and a watch Notepad and a pen. Earphones and a watch. Bed, Phone, Toothbrush, Toothpaste, Bowl, Cereal, Milk, Spoon.   Earphones and a watch. N/A	Jordan Walters Parveer Mahal Hassan Kawshar Parveer Mahal Jordan Walters Sophie Hawkins Parveer Mahal Hassan Kawshar Jordan Walters Jordan Walters Parveer Mahal Hassan Kawshar Parveer Mahal Hassan Kawshar Jordan Walters Parveer Mahal Hassan Kawshar Jordan Walters